Tuesday, April 5, 2011

Critique of "Siesta"

Feedback from the contest judges on my failed story (I think perhaps the positives were written by a different person than were the negatives, as several aspects seem to be mentioned in both the "liked" and "disliked" categories):

''Siesta'' by Matthew McHugh - WHAT THE JUDGE(S) LIKED ABOUT YOUR SCRIPT - ..................It's easy to like the protagonist, especially with his willingness to put himself in danger for the cat. The details in the story add to its realism.......There is an interesting and odd sense of humor at work in the piece, certainly. The final punchline is part of that overall odd world that is masterfully created throughout.................................................... WHAT THE JUDGES FEEL NEEDS WORK - ..................I think the title could be more relevant to the subject matter. While the ending is amusing, it doesn't seem like enough of a resolution.......I'm not sure that the main character is as interesting or funny as he thinks he is. I think a little more less of his interior world and a little more action might be worth considering. I got a bit "tired" of him pretty early on and wanted more compelling things to be taking place in the story. Maybe it's just his digressive way of talking that irked me a bit......................…....

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